A rewrite of my literature review.
This is the feedback I received from my professor on the text uploaded:
I have read your literature review and have come to the conclusion that I am unable to provide detailed feedback on your text. The problem is that the text is not structured at all and jumps from one topic to another (and often back again). Many sentences are also unclear.
Please provide me with a new version, dividing this literature review into several subsections, each with its own title.
At the end of a section (or at the beginning of the next section) you should also write a transition sentence to indicate the logical connection.
Within a single section you will normally have several paragraphs. Each paragraph should contain only one idea (which is elaborated in that paragraph). You can even summarize that idea in one sentence, if that makes it easier to write, and then mention it at the beginning of that paragraph. If you read all the summary sentences in succession, they should form a logical story.
An additional problem is that you have not written an introductory section in which you push the topic forward and formulate a concrete research question. As a result, it is also impossible for me to estimate whether or not the various ideas you discuss in your literature study are relevant to answering your research question.
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