Explain how #BlackLivesMatter can be seen as a type of collective action to challenge authority and legitimacy, and to what degree can it be considered as an example of mass protest?

These are the feedbacks that i got from my last essay on ISIS, I’ve been trying to fix my essay based on the feedbacks but i only got 69/100 for my essay. I don’t have problem with my referencing, just edit my essay. Please see the feedbacks given by my mentor below:

1. Mostly clear identification of relevant issues/problems. Thorough analysis of issues/problems with alternative solutions provided. There is some room for development. Clear connection between theory and practice.

2. Generally clear diagnosis and arguments are presented, but there may be inconsistencies. Research is utilised to support arguments, but the effectiveness of this may be limited.

3. Response is clearly organised, but there may be minor inconsistencies. Written expression generally conveys meaning to reader. Citing and referencing is maintained with minimal errors.

4. ISIS leaders have been quoted arguing that they will not stop attacking and hating the westerners as long as they do not accept Islam.” Where is this quote? Who are quoted as saying what exactly?

The essay overall is well-written. However, it becomes repetitive after some point. That, is it goes back to same points about radical interpretation of Islam, enforcing strict adherence and Westernism without adding anything new. The last section was a good place to provide some detail into ISIS’s actions.

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